Abstruse Oblivion
1 My mind roams free
2 Every night,
3 On an adventure,
4 Through the tumult of silence.
5 Everything is loud; everything is silent.
6 My mind out to all of the memories
7 Of the long hard day.
8 All is calm; all is wild.
9 My mind dregs
10 Through the past
11 Reminiscing bittersweet days
12 And mourning the ones wished forgotten.
13 Away slips my mind and my consciousness,
14 Reaching with open arms to the Almighty
15 And deep down to embrace Lucifer.
16 My mind then forgets
17 The eyes, the ears
18 And sees and listens with the heart.
19 In this prison
20 I find freedom
21 From everything
22 And from myself.
Self Analysis
Line 3/12: Personification- “The mind” is said
to “roam free.” Minds don’t actually get up and walk around. Minds also don’t
mourn, technically.
Line 4: Oxymoron- Tumult is defined as
disorder or an outbreak of disorder, which contradicts the word describing it,
“silence.
Line 5/8: Parallelism- Everything/all is
_______; everything/all is _________ = similar structure
Line 11: Paradox- The word bittersweet
contradicts itself, but is accurate.
Line 13: Zeugma- “Away slips my mind”
and “away slips my consciousness” produce different meanings. The latter
intends to create the picture of falling asleep and the former illustrates
dreaming or the like.
Line 13: Inversion- Most would normally
say “my mind slips away” or “my consciousness slips away.”
Line 14/15: Allusion- “The Almighty” refers to God
and “Lucifer” is Satan, in case you didn’t know. Referring to God brings to
mind heaven and good things, so the mind thinks of good things. Mentioning
Satan refers to hell, and thus bad things, and one might make the connection
that the mind thinks of bad things.
Line 17: Metonymy- By looking at line 18,
one can tell that “the eyes” refers to sight and “the ears” refers to hearing
Line 3/9/16: Anaphora- While not in succession, the
repetition of the phrase “my mind” should be evident. Every other sentence begins with the phrase,
emphasizing the subject, the narrator’s mind.
Interesting and deep. *finger snaps*
ReplyDeleteVery deep, I like how its short but gets to the point. I like line 12, very well written
ReplyDeleteI feel like I really know you now. Haha but really your poem is really good :)
ReplyDeleteI like your short lines and the way they give this poem a unique shape. You might consider playing around with some inversion and/or creative spacing to add to the poem's sense of obscurity.
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